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Dear Christoph,

Thank you for the opportunity to provide this professional editing sample on your behalf. It was my pleasure to review your writing.

Your writing style was quite engaging. I enjoyed reading the sample you provided, it was well written and interesting to read. I don\’t think it started off too slowly. And there isn\’t much of what I read that I would change, but of course, I only read a small amount of your novel, so it\’s a bit difficult for me to judge right now. I\’m sure if I read the entire book, I would have more useful suggestions.

Attached is your free editing sample. All comments are included within and I hope you find them useful. You can also view all the layers of editing in the Track Changes mode of MS Word using the review toolbar. I have altered grammar, punctuation and structural elements in order to assist you in presenting a clear and effective piece.

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